Score: 8

"Some classy moments, but..."

submission: Bitter Bill

date: July 7, 2008

Like the dude below me said, you have some issues with pacing.

The gestures and frame-by-frame stuff are brilliant in this animation. Nice sense of flavour.

The pace of the thing though, along with the very sleepy background music, kind of make it drag along in parts.

I say take the brilliant bits and expand them into a full animation in that style.

Score: 7

"Pretty cool, but..."

submission: Pondskater

date: June 30, 2008

...a change of scenery every now and then, beyond simply changing the location of the lily pad, would be nice. Also, it's a little odd that your "pondskater" can float straight over the bee hive.

As a practical tip, it's good to put an invisible shape behind your text buttons so that people don't have to click specifically on the letters to access a menu item.

Other than the above, this is a pretty solid, enjoyable little game.

Score: 7

"It'd get you a great mark, but..."

submission: The_Weekend

date: June 30, 2008

...it's kind of ugly to look at. You demonstrate some solid Flash skills, and I'd mark you high as a teacher/assessor, but it lacks the polish of a high-scoring NewGrounds submission.

Lots of potential, and a good start, but you still have a ways to go in refining your art. Things like disappearing text on buildings, cars driving over elements of a background they should be driving under, etc. really take away from what is a solid little narrative.